Revisions

I keep revising a poem I posted here last Thursday (Notes on There's a Cricket in the Wardobe), because at first it had seemed okay, but now, each day it seems worse and worse...and so it becomes shorter and shorter. maybe by the end of the week it will be entirely gone!okay, i think i'm finally done with it. I'm left with just three sentences and a new title.it is posted below in it's new incarnation. I've deleted the old one.